Open letter to Mr Blackwell

[Micalijo]

Have you just been on football heaven BB? Last caller using cheap as chips when referring to Blackie?

 

[beightonblade]

Have you just been on football heaven BB? Last caller using cheap as chips when referring to Blackie?

no but i'm getting Royalty money

 

[raul]

It's a bit meh really Ollie. I'd write back and offer to refund your expenses when we play poorly if you'll pay double when we pay well.

I'd be very interested in seeing any reply though.

 

[mickle-blade]

The only letter he would get from me comes with the heading P45.

 

[bladesman3]

i could not agree more..everything you have said expresses exaclty my feelings today! last night wa sthe worst performance i have ever seen by a Championship team..yes, any, not just the Blades..awful and sad..we left with 10 mins to go as i could not stand it any more..cant pass, cant shoot, cant tackle,cant defend, cant attack...Bunn comes out of it ok and we can maybe excuse Nosworthy but what a load of bloody rubbish that was...

 

[Sothall_Blade]

"I am writing to you to suggest that you refunded my ticket"
"I have written down and my travel expenses"
"You’re tactics were appalling"
"F*** OFF"
"You’re man management"

<< If you really did choose your words carefully, I would suggest choosing some different ones before you think about sending this>>[/QUOTE]

How do you expect me to tell someone who is not doing there job properly that they are not doing it properly without it being personal. I balme Blackwell for this and hence I use the words you and your. Ok there's one insult in their, but that is just emphasising I'd like him to leave the club and not come back.

I was just proof-reading the blessed thing for you Ollie. If you really want to send it and be taken seriously, I would suggest the following amendments:-

"I am writing to you to suggest that you refund my ticket" (not refunded)
"I have written down my travel expenses" (not "down and my travel expenses")
"Your tactics were appalling" (not "you are tactics were appalling")
"Please resign" (not "F*** OFF")
"Your man management" (not "you are man management")

...and leave his mother out of it. She might have passed away or be senile for all you know. No need.

 

[SwissBlade]

Ollesendro, By your standards that letter is poor. The structure is all wrong, why would anyone want to read on after the first sentence? So you've wasted 4 paras because of a poor opening.

The reader will want to know what right you have to launch into criticism, we all know that you care about the club, but this is just a whinging start.

I don't think it gets any better as you read on. You're critical, but the reasons for your criticism is that it "was a joke". Why was it a joke? You're writing to a guy that has coached for years and knows the game etc.

State the facts, don't speculate about his mother or ask retorical questions, it adds no value.

You contradict yourself in para 3

I think I speak for the majority of the fans when I say

I cannot of course speak for the whole of the Sheffield United supporters, that would be arrogant of me

If you want to put your point across with intelligence then getting personal and swearing is neither big nor clever. If you really want them to read this then rewrite it.

I'm not having a go just offering my opinion. I understand what you're saying and if you want I can proof read the 2nd rev for you. In my opinion you're going about it the wrong way.

 

[implied]

No offence Ollessendro, but it's really a bad idea to download and open .doc files from the internet.

Perhaps you could copy and paste it into the thread?

 

[Wards]

that letter is embarrassing...

 

[Stafford Blade]

Have you read the letter carefully? I do not say that I speak for the whole fans. I have chosen my words carefully Obi One.

I have read your letter carefully and it looks like it has been written by a 12 year old with a potty mouth. Not just that, but a 12 year old that is having to attend extra English classes as his grasp of the English language is so poor.

 

[Jon Bon]

"I am writing to you to suggest that you refund my ticket" (not refunded).

Shouldn't that be 'refund the price (or cost) of my ticket'?

Have you just been on football heaven BB? Last caller using cheap as chips when referring to Blackie?

I thought that too. Whoever it was, I reckon it was the same guy who pretends to be Jed the Baaaahnsley fan ("..that Billy Sharp is faster than our Kes!')

 

[boo radley]

He's a Gorilla, give him a break. His command of the English language is usually ok. If I had a criticism it would be that his usual posts are far too long and he goes into great detail. In this letter to the Manager he goes in to very little detail.
You can be thankful Ollie that Pinchy is not admin or you would be banned.
To all other Tutters who love correct order of sentence, how did I do?

 

[Linz]

Gentlemen, may I remind you that we do ask that all opinions are countered respectfully on this forum, no matter how much you may disagree with the original statement.

I understand some of you may vehemently disagree with what was written, but please keep it constructive. I don't want fall outs.

 

[boo radley]

He's a Gorilla, give him a break. His command of the English language is usually ok. If I had a criticism it would be that his usual posts are far too long and he goes into great detail. In this letter to the Manager he goes in to very little detail.
You can be thankful Ollie that Pinchy is not admin or you would be banned.
To all other Tutters who love correct order of sentence, how did I do?

Gentlemen, may I remind you that we do ask that all opinions are countered respectfully on this forum, no matter how much you may disagree with the original statement.

I understand some of you may vehemently disagree with what was written, but please keep it constructive. I don't want fall outs.

I don't understand?
Thought I was respectful and constuctive in my criticism. I even asked if I had done ok.

 

[Linz]

I don't understand?
Thought I was respectful and constuctive in my criticism. I even asked if I had done ok.

If I was talking to you and you alone, I'd have quoted you in my post, as I have here.

The "Gentlemen" insinuates plural. Meaning more than one gentleman i.e. not just you. It was a gentle reminder for everyone as a whole.

I rather feel you have a guilty conscience

 

[boo radley]

If I was talking to you and you alone, I'd have quoted you in my post, as I have here.

The "Gentlemen" insinuates plural. Meaning more than one gentleman i.e. not just you. It was a gentle reminder for everyone as a whole.

I rather feel you have a guilty conscience

Ahh you see my command of the English language WILL benefit from your input.

 

[Sothall_Blade]

Shouldn't that be 'refund the price (or cost) of my ticket'?

Yes, he could have said that but I was just revising his original sentence which was, "I am writing to you to suggest that you refund(ed) my ticket and travel expenses for the game at Watford last night"

If I was rewriting it, I would have also mentioned the £10M transfer profit, the 45% win record and the 7th, 3rd and 6th place league positions

 

[Ollessendro]

I think that as soon as you start writing FUCk OFF in capital letters you lose all respect. Why you can't put over your feelings without resorting to brain dead swearing is beyond me. Up til then you were going well but if I was KB I would throw it in the bin

It's actually 'FOOK' OFF

You could have done a bit better with that letter really, couldn't you? Doesn't go into that much depth about all the things that are wrong and is littered with spelling errors.

Yes Zlatan I probabaly could have. I knocked the thing up in 5 minutes before I rushed off after work to play football.

i could not agree more..everything you have said expresses exaclty my feelings today! last night wa sthe worst performance i have ever seen by a Championship team..yes, any, not just the Blades..awful and sad..we left with 10 mins to go as i could not stand it any more..cant pass, cant shoot, cant tackle,cant defend, cant attack...Bunn comes out of it ok and we can maybe excuse Nosworthy but what a load of bloody rubbish that was...

Thanks matey.

YOU SEE IT'S FUNNY HOW THE PEOPLE HOW WENT ON TUESDAY NIGHT ARE NOT COMING OUT AND CRITICSING THIS LETTER BUT THE ONE'S WHO DID ARE NOT!?

"I am writing to you to suggest that you refunded my ticket"
"I have written down and my travel expenses"
"You’re tactics were appalling"
"F*** OFF"
"You’re man management"

<< If you really did choose your words carefully, I would suggest choosing some different ones before you think about sending this>>

I was just proof-reading the blessed thing for you Ollie. If you really want to send it and be taken seriously, I would suggest the following amendments:-

"I am writing to you to suggest that you refund my ticket" (not refunded)
"I have written down my travel expenses" (not "down and my travel expenses")
"Your tactics were appalling" (not "you are tactics were appalling")
"Please resign" (not "F*** OFF")
"Your man management" (not "you are man management")

...and leave his mother out of it. She might have passed away or be senile for all you know. No need.[/QUOTE]

Thanks for the tips Sothall.

Ollesendro, By your standards that letter is poor. The structure is all wrong, why would anyone want to read on after the first sentence? So you've wasted 4 paras because of a poor opening.

The reader will want to know what right you have to launch into criticism, we all know that you care about the club, but this is just a whinging start.

I don't think it gets any better as you read on. You're critical, but the reasons for your criticism is that it "was a joke". Why was it a joke? You're writing to a guy that has coached for years and knows the game etc.

State the facts, don't speculate about his mother or ask retorical questions, it adds no value.

You contradict yourself in para 3

If you want to put your point across with intelligence then getting personal and swearing is neither big nor clever. If you really want them to read this then rewrite it.

I'm not having a go just offering my opinion. I understand what you're saying and if you want I can proof read the 2nd rev for you. In my opinion you're going about it the wrong way.

Yep, it's a bit of a botch job. But you have to ask yourself Swiss, =have I really sent this badly constructed letter or was I being a naughty boy and provocing reaction with a bit of (an attempt of) tongue in cheek homour?

I have read your letter carefully and it looks like it has been written by a 12 year old with a potty mouth. Not just that, but a 12 year old that is having to attend extra English classes as his grasp of the English language is so poor.

Now there you go getting all personal and insultive. I think you not being able to hanlde someone's opinion without resorting to insults show's who has the real 12 year olds mentality. Bravo Stafford!

 

[Ollessendro]

My my, this has got some reaction over night hasn't it????

I didn't realise that there were so many clappers on here that would take offence!!!?? I'll think twiuce next time before I post anything bad about King kevin next time!!??

 

[Jon Bon]

He's a Gorilla, give him a break. His command of the English language is usually ok. If I had a criticism it would be that his usual posts are far too long and he goes into great detail. In this letter to the Manager he goes in to very little detail.
You can be thankful Ollie that Pinchy is not admin or you would be banned.
To all other Tutters who love correct order of sentence, how did I do?

..his usual posts are far too long and go into great detail. 'Go' not 'goes'. Even better would have been 'go into too much detail'.

Shouldn't be a capital 'M' on manager in this instance. It's a description rather than a title i.e. 'the manager' rather than 'He is the Development Manager'

One line gap please to separate paragraphs.

Again no capital 'T' in tutters. It's a description of those who tut, not a title.

The ones who are more stringent than myself would probably ask for a comma after 'thankful' and one after 'Ollie', but I'll overlook that.

All in all, a good effort which can be improved upon by a little more attention to detail. 7.5/10





Ps. I'm only having a laugh. I'm as thick, if not thicker than the next Bloke....




No capital 'B' in bloke. It's a description, not a ........................

 

[Wards]

I don't think it's the sentiment thats got people's backs up, it's the way it's been constructed, and reads like it's been put together by an angry 13 year old and riddled with expletives.

You're much likely to get your point over if you can retain some element of politeness whilst being constructive in your ranting.

 

[boo radley]

..his usual posts are far too long and go into great detail. 'Go' not 'goes'. Even better would have been 'go into too much detail'.

Shouldn't be a capital 'M' on manager in this instance. It's a description rather than a title i.e. 'the manager' rather than 'He is the Development Manager'

One line gap please to separate paragraphs.

Again no capital 'T' in tutters. It's a description of those who tut, not a title.

The ones who are more stringent than myself would probably ask for a comma after 'thankful' and one after 'Ollie', but I'll overlook that.

All in all, a good effort which can be improved upon by a little more attention to detail. 7.5/10





Ps. I'm only having a laugh. I'm as thick, if not thicker than the next Bloke....




No capital 'B' in bloke. It's a description, not a ........................

Thanks, but can you not have a desciptive title?
PS got to work catch up on my English later if thats ok Jon Bon:thumbup:

 

[Coily]

My my, this has got some reaction over night hasn't it????

I didn't realise that there were so many clappers on here that would take offence!!!?? I'll think twiuce next time before I post anything bad about King kevin next time!!??

So anyone who disagrees with you is a clapper now? I don’t think it’s actually got anything to do with how people are feeling about Blackwell and the team, it's a reaction to your "letter", which read like the rantings of a petulant child.

“You are slowly sucking the life out of our beautiful football club...”

“FUCK OFF! Stop wasting everyone’s time.”

“...if you leave now I will not hold things against you.”

“So I reiterate, and again I think I speak for the majority of fans, that I will not hold any grudges if you get the fuck away from Beautiful down town Bramall Lane.”

What is the point of this utter garbage? Do you actually want a refund or did you just want to abuse the man?

I don’t think you should send anything in writing that you wouldn’t say to a person’s face. And I don’t believe for a second you’d say any of this to Blackwell’s face. I could be wrong of course, but I doubt it.

UTB

Coily

 

[Foxy]

YOU SEE IT'S FUNNY HOW THE PEOPLE HOW WENT ON TUESDAY NIGHT ARE NOT COMING OUT AND CRITICSING THIS LETTER BUT THE ONE'S WHO DID ARE NOT!?

I went and spent significantly more to do so.

But I'd think about how it'd be recieved and the wording and what you are actually saying.

If you put across your points in a more contructive way, rather than demands and insults, chances are you will get a reply.

Send it as it is and I don't think they'll entertain even spending long reading it.

That isn't a dig at you, more my opinion on the likelyhood to get a reply with your approach.

 

[MAQ]

Badly worded, badly written, arrogant and contradictive.

Send it in if you want, you'll only make yourself look like an idiot! Which will make any chance of you being compensated for the other night even less.

 

[Mousey]

YOU SEE IT'S FUNNY HOW THE PEOPLE HOW WENT ON TUESDAY NIGHT ARE NOT COMING OUT AND CRITICSING THIS LETTER BUT THE ONE'S WHO DID ARE NOT!?

I went on Tuesday night and your letter looks foolish and should I be on the receiving end of this letter, I would ignore it as I would feel far superior to the person who wrote it.

It seems childish and looks like you wrote it while throwing your dummy out of the pram.

If you do want your feelings to be known I suggest you write a letter or an email that is constructive and gets your feelings across with no swearing and with the best spelling and grammar you can.

 

[mattbianco1]

If you do want your feelings to be known I suggest you write a letter or an email that is constructive and gets your feelings across with no swearing and with the best spelling and grammar you can.

With no F-Words and maybe the odd grammar check

Send it in if you want, you'll only make yourself look like an idiot! Which will make any chance of you being compensated for the other night even less.

I agree... Good job you didn't put your seat number in or you may turn up Saturday to find a big steaming turd on your seat. The aftermath of the McCabe families friday night curry from Lancers Take-away!

 

[MAQ]

Good job you didn't put your seat number in or you may turn up Saturday to find a big steaming turd on your seat. The aftermath of the McCabe families friday night curry from Lancers Take-away!

Was this part aimed at me Matt?

 

[mattbianco1]

No not at all. I was following on from your comments. Saying that should he send it then maybe excrement may be present saturday

 

[MAQ]

No not at all. I was following on from your comments. Saying that should he send it then maybe excrement may be present saturday

Thats OK, that was how i read it but just wanted to clarify